Friday, April 29, 2011

First Draft Of Research Paper # 1

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qAWkMvp_JqPmJFj6GxHds_kbmmN5QDcPz8z8n6BeksY/edit?pli=1&hl=en&authkey=CKHbrcoL#
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3 comments:

  1. Miss BMay 1, 2011 at 8:13 PM

    Check google docs and/or e-mail for comments.

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  2. Miss BMay 6, 2011 at 4:46 AM

    I reviewed your first draft and assigned it points. Please read my comments and see me if you have any questions.

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  3. UnknownMay 7, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    Hi Natalie my name is Justine Tirado and I'm from Eng 260.  I was asked to read your essay and give you some feedback so here's what I think...

    After reading your essay, from what I understand in the first paragraph I think that the thesis you are aiming for is really interesting and could potentially make a really good essay at times though it is hard to understand what you are trying to say because of the wording and it looks like you're missing words in sentences so just make sure you proof read your writing.  Also keep in mind that people (like myself) who are reading your paper are not familiarized with the text you have researched so although what you write may seem clear to you it can be confusing for the reader if you do not explain.  Lastly, I feel like your essay was a little all over the place. You have really good and strong ideas you just have to organize them a little more and make sure you keep tying it back to your thesis.  If you organize and make your ideas clearer you can have a great essay.

    Hope that helped.  Good luck! :)

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